"Hits and Misses"

Hits=
Big Brother blog post
 I have recently started watching, and finishing, this show that I am obsessed with called Big Brother. I just watched season 7 all-stars and thought it was amazing. Basically big brother is a game show where a group of people, about 16 usually, are stuck in a house for the whole summer, so for about 90 days with little to no contact to the outside world. Every week, one houseguest is evicted from the house, unless there is a twist, which there are many twists throughout the game. But first, the house guest compete in challenges for different prizes like head of household, a power to change the game, food, to win a veto that doesn't allow you to be eliminated, and many more. This game consists of so many twists and interesting challenges which makes this game show even more interesting to watch. There have been 18 seasons so far and they are preparing for their 19th season this summer.
   In the 7th season of big brother, it is very different because instead of random people to become the house guest, the house guest consist of previous players from the past 6 seasons of Big Brother. This makes the game more interesting because these players all have amazing strategies and they all think they will know how to win because they've seen someone win in their season. If you are the last house guest in the Big Brother house, you win half a million dollars. This is the reason that this show gets pretty dramatic at times and many different alliances and feuds are formed between the house guests.  
I really enjoyed writing this piece because I got to pick a topic that I like. This made it easier to write enough about the topic, and I could really focusing on some of the good traits of writing.


    vocabulary.com words story
     When our character arrived at their home today, they noticed that something was off. Nothing that anyone could see, but something he could feel. Let me introduce myself before I continue in this story. I am Hank, your narrator.And my job is to tell this story to you. Anyways, back to the story. So when our character looked around the home, he suddenly felt idiotic and realized what had been wrong. His roommate was not their to greet him today. He thought it was strange, but thought nothing more of the matter. "Perhaps," he thought, "she went out to go shopping or maybe she will surprise me with something." Now, rather that being afraid, he carried on with his regular activities: finish up some work, make dinner, eat, shower, and then go to sleep. He was all ready for been when the doorbell rang. He immediately assumed it to be his roommate, but he thought, "Why would she be ringing the doorbell?" When he opened the door, the only thing there was his roommate with a bullet through her head. This was the demise, or end, of his life undercover.
   Yes, you read that right, our character is an undercover agent who had been living in disguise with a roommate who was also undercover. This event let him know that they would come after him next, and that they know that him and his roommate were undercover agents. Our character then proceeded to take the bullet out of his roommate's head. I know this sounds disgusting and possibly unnecessary, but by taking out the bullet, he would know who shot her. When he got the bullet, he looked at it closely and that gave him the wisdom, or accumulated knowledge, of who had shot her. It was the rebel spies, and they were about to see the worst side of him.
I felt like I could really be creative in this piece of writing, and I think I showed a good story and had consistent sentence fluency.  


Song
     In the song, "I Must Belong Somewhere," by Bright Eyes, many poetic devices that we have learned in class are used throughout the lyrics. First off, euphony is used throughout the poem because it has a pleasing smoothness when you read the lyrics, for example, in the first line, "Leave the bright blue door on the whitewashed wall." Another thing that I noticed when reading through these lyrics, was that the words today and remained were alternating repetition at the end of the stanzas. I  perceived  this as metaphors for how the artist might not want the day to change or anything that is concurring that day to change. Another thing that I noticed after reading through the song was that the title was never directly mentioned in the song. Even though the title describes the entirety of the song quite well, the phrase itself is never found in the lyrics. Another poetic device I found throughout these lyrics was the use of anaphora because phrases, such as the word leave, is found at the beginning of almost every line.
    In all, the poetic devices used throughout "I Must Belong Somewhere," contribute to the message and mood of the song as a whole. The use of anaphora for the word leave in this song, would suggest that the writer is telling the reader to live and let live. This repeated phrase also has a deeper meaning for the stress on the word leave. This poetic device and the many others used throughout this song give a deeper meaning to the lyrics and help the reader to find a deeper meaning to the words. All of the poetic devices are used help the writer connect with the reader on either an understanding level or a personal level.

In this writing, I felt like I really interpreted the song well and used interesting word choice that showed my understanding for poetic devices.


Misses=
Research Paper
In my Research Paper, I felt like I was not as passionate about my topic as I could have been. This made it difficult for me to enjoy writing this paper and caused me to slack off when it came to using the traits of a good writer.

Annotated Bibliography
My annotated Bibliography was a pain for me to do because it took an extremely long time to complete and I found it hard to find some of the information required. The hardest part to find for me was proving the source was reliable because it took me a while to research the source used for my research paper.

Reading Responses blogs
I felt that it was sort of difficult for me to recall on past information throughout the book that I responded to. I also found it difficult because I have always had trouble interpreting the text.

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